
“What you need is luck,” Gemma says.
We’re hiding out in the storage room, pretending to move things from one spot to another. Although she’s wearing the same ugly blue vest as me, it doesn’t look bad on her. She pulls up the mesh sleeve of her striped undershirt and taps a tattoo of a magic eight ball on the inside of her wrist with a pointed black fingernail. One of her silver rings clinks against the other.
A moment of silence sits between us. I’m wondering if she means I need her, but I’m terrified to think such a thing. Last night after work we hung out by her beat-up brown car. She offered me a clove cigarette from her huge black purse and we stood shoulder to shoulder smoking. She talked nonstop, hilarious shit about her roommates. I laughed like an idiot.
I grab a bag of expired bread rolls and toss them at her. She catches them and sticks her tongue out at me. Her green eyes sparkle and dance like sunlight bouncing off the river. I’m in trouble. I force a laugh and look away.
“No shit I need luck. There’s no way I’m paying my rent this month. Whatever. It’s a crappy place anyway…”
My voice trails off because it sounds like I’m asking for a place to stay and I know her two roommates are assholes. I’m fucking this up. She gives me a reassuring look and I feel unsteady. My words come out in an outtake of breath as if they’d been sitting in my mouth waiting for me to let my guard down.
“Let’s go to the ocean.”
The image of her sitting beside me in the sand at sunset makes my face burn and I turn away from her. What am I doing? I haven’t had a car in two years let alone funds for gas or food. All I do is complain to her about being poor. She’s got to think I want to use her. I’m such an idiot.
“How about dinner tonight?”
She’s beside me now holding my hand. I look at her and it’s as if kindness has taken human form—all soft edges and gentle warmth. Flecks of gold dance in the green of her eyes. I’m drowning.
“Would you go out to dinner with me tonight, Eloise? My treat. I want to show you something.”
I nod as one of the night bosses, Mr. Parker, walks in the door. His brick-red puffy face looks at us standing close together and he frowns. I catch a glimpse of a golden cross in his chest hair and I brace myself for whatever nonsense he’s about to throw our way. His voice is fast and breathy.
“Eloise, go outside and break down the boxes to be recycled. Gemma, I’m moving you to books. Let’s go girls! I don’t pay you to stand around smiling all day.”
My shift ends a half hour before Gemma’s and I spot her standing in the book section holding a dictionary in her hand as some sweaty overweight man yells at her. He’s inches from her face. I want to punch him and rescue her, but Mr. Parker’s lurking nearby. I can smell his cheap cologne. I don’t want to get her into trouble and I need my stupid job. My feet drag as I walk away.
I wash myself up in the bathroom and go outside to stand next to her car. She comes out ten minutes after her shift ends with tears in her eyes. Instinctively I hug her close and she lets me hold her while she sobs. The customers at our store can be brutal. The bosses aren’t much better. I wish I could take her away from this place.
“Some people are so mean, you know?” she says into my shoulder.
I do know. My entire life has been filled with mean people, but it won’t help her to compare pain. She hands me a clove cigarette and we smoke again, standing with our backs against the cool metal of her car. A flock of geese flies past honking loudly. The sky darkens. She flicks her cigarette on the ground and grinds it out with the toe of her black Doc Martin boot.
“Okay, let’s get away from this place.”
We drive to a Chinese restaurant called “Lucky Day” and she orders us both rice bowls with extra chicken to-go. She plays old Britney Spears music and we sing along at the top of our lungs. We watch the sunset turn the sky orange and purple.
After about 20 minutes she pulls onto a dirt road. It’s bumpy and uneven so she slows the car. We drive through tall arching trees and a narrow twisting road going up and up. I hold onto the door handle and she laughs at me. When we reach the top she turns off the car and smiles.
“Get out.”
A tiny part of me wonders if this is where I die. It’s a ridiculous thought because I’m not scared of her, but it’s the middle of nowhere and we barely know each other. She seems to sense my discomfort and laughs again.
She pulls out a flashlight, a blanket, and two black hoodies which we quickly put on. She hands me the bag of food and I follow her through a densely wooded area until we reach a pile of boulders. Without hesitation, she scrambles to the top and I follow as best I can. She drops the blanket and clicks off the flashlight.
“What do you think?”
At first, my eyes see nothing but blackness, but soon I’m able to recognize a vast field of trees and grasses spreading out below us for what looks like forever. A tiny patch of glittery water catches the pale moonlight—a river or stream. She tilts my head up and I gasp. Without any streetlights or homes, the sky above us has exploded with more stars than I’ve ever seen. It’s what poets write about and artists paint. It’s breathtaking.
“Wow.”
“Right?”
We stand for a long time saying nothing until her stomach rumbles loudly eliciting giggles from both of us. Spreading out the blanket, we eat the rice bowls in silence. I’ve never been able to recognize a meaningful moment when I’m in it, but this time I do. This isn’t any old place and she’s not any old person. It feels like fate. Like destiny. Like an origin story of happiness.
Eventually, it gets cold and we decide to walk back to the car. She blasts the heater but leaves off the lights. We sit in silence for a long time. It’s as if neither one of us wants to break the spell cast by the night sky. I finally speak and my voice sounds small.
“Thank you.”
“It’s my favorite place. I found it a few years ago when I was looking for a place to…well…I didn’t really want to live anymore. This place sort of healed me. I’m glad you liked it.”
“I loved it.”
A loud crinkling sound fills the car as she reaches into the front pocket of her hoodie and pulls out our fortune cookies. She turns on the overhead light and we both crack them open.
“The real kindness comes from within you,” she reads. “Ugh. These things are getting more and more generic. That’s not a fortune. Maybe you will have better luck. Read yours.”
“A golden egg of opportunity falls into your lap this month.”
We both burst out laughing. I know a joke is there somewhere about her on my lap, but I don’t try to get it out. Instead, I fold up the fortune and put it into my pocket. Who knows? Maybe my luck is about to change. With her, it feels like anything is possible.
“It’s 11:11.”
She’s pointing at the small clock and I nod. I can tell I’m missing something. She squeezes my hand.
“Do you know what it means?”
“You turn into a pumpkin? I wake up and it’s all a dream? Your clock is broken?”
“11 in numerology is a master number. It’s extra powerful. It takes the energy of 1 and amplifies it. To see 11:11 means you are on the right path.”
She squeezes my hand again and when our eyes lock the car tilts sideways.
***
My studio apartment has an old-fashioned landline with a chocolate brown phone attached to the kitchen wall beside an electric stove with one working burner. The back left. The dirty tan spirling cord stretches long enough to reach every room. I find myself sitting on the wobbly toilet staring at the torn flowered wallpaper with the phone still pressed to my ear.
The person on the other end of the line, Jimmy something, has hung up. Boop. Boop. Boop. It’s a faded electric sound and for a moment I think it’s someone mimicking or mocking the noise. I listen harder and realize I’m wrong. Nobody is there. I’m alone.
You’d think finding out your only relative has died would be terribly sad, but I’ve not seen my grandpa for a long time. He left me with a family for the weekend when I was five and never came back. I don’t blame him.
Holding the phone out in front of me as if the booping sound might be a countdown to an explosion, I walk through the narrow hallway to the kitchen. With a click of plastic sliding into plastic, it’s quiet again. I sit on the cold linoleum floor in my underwear and bra. Crumbs stick to the back of my thighs. All I can think about is the phone call.
I didn’t know the landline worked until it rang. A British man speaks to me in a soft tone, as if he’s speaking to a small child or a furry animal, not someone who will be 20 years old in a few weeks. I suppose it’s meant to be soothing, but it feels condescending.
“I’ve been trying to reach you for days but apparently your cell number has been disconnected. I got this number from your work. I’m sorry to be the bearer of bad news, Miss Lewis, but your grandfather has passed away. He died in a car crash on Friday night after attending a concert at the Hollywood Bowl. It’s a tragedy. He was a good man. A fine man.”
He pauses. I’m not sure why. Perhaps he’s waiting for me to cry or ask follow-up questions. I don’t do either. Eventually, he clears his throat and speaks again, this time he sounds happier. Almost gleeful.
“He left you a considerable sum of money, Miss Lewis. Property too. I’ll need you to come into my office in LA. to sign the paperwork. It’s pretty straightforward. Check your email for the details. You are about to be a very wealthy woman. Congratulations.”
Another pause. I probably mumble “okay” or “yes” but I don’t remember. His voice transforms back to soothing—the sound equivalent of backing away slowly. He knows it’s a lot for anyone to process, especially someone clearly not doing great in her life.
“Sorry for your loss, Miss Lewis. See you soon. Goodbye.”
Magic eight ball. Golden egg. 11:11. Gemma.
A dripping sound from the sink brings me back to where I am—sitting on my dirty kitchen floor shivering. The faucet’s been leaking for the past three months, but right now the sound feels like an urgent alarm. I’ve got to get moving. Things to do. I don’t know how to do any of them.
A line of ants marches across the floor toward a stray light-brown generic toasted O piece from the last of the cereal I ate dry for dinner last night. I trace the line as it marches up my scratched brown cupboards to the small curtainless kitchen window. My thoughts wander as I watch them, backward instead of forward.
Both my parents died when I was a baby in a horrific accident on the highway. They’d gone dancing at the Elk Lodge as their first outing since I was born. The headline in the newspaper read “Swing Dance Champions Killed in Two-Car Crash” with the subhead “Alcohol Involved.” I printed out a copy of the article from the library when I was a teenager and remembered the words “quick” and “instant.”
Framed in my bedroom is a photo the babysitter took before they left. We are standing in front of a glittery silver Christmas tree. Mom’s dressed in deep purple and dad in dark green. He’s got his lean arms around her tiny waist and they are both staring at me smiling. I’m wrapped in a pale pink blanket and my red hair and blue eyes are the brightest things in the photo. We look deliriously happy. I wish I could remember.
My grandpa did his best but he wasn’t cut out to care for a small child. A music producer with contracts with some of the biggest names in the business, his lifestyle wasn’t exactly family-friendly. His LA office walls were covered in shiny gold and platinum album covers. He talked fast, always clicked a pen, and smiled a lot. He chewed gum. I don’t remember if he ever hugged me.
I do remember his secretary. She wore cat-eye glasses, and bright red lipstick, and smelled of vanilla. I spent a lot of time hiding under her desk and eating chocolate. Her name was Valerie. Will she be at the funeral? She’s got to be in her 80s.
I need to make plans. Take out the garbage. Spray the ants. Get time off from work. A bus ticket. I’ll need something black to wear to the funeral. Will Gemma miss me?
“You are about to be a very wealthy woman.”
I can’t think about it too much or maybe it won’t happen. Bad things always follow when I get my hopes up. Fortune cookies are nonsense. I look at the clock and see it’s 11:11.
***
The last few weeks have been a blur of technicolor LA opulence. Jimmy, the fancy British lawyer who called me, is a pretty decent guy with his silk Italian suits, well-manicured hands, and rich warm laugh. I know he’s paid to help me, but I couldn’t survive without the services he provides—a strict and steady Hollywood regime of valium, alcohol, and expensive dresses. I’m Alice in Wonderland and it’s all curiouser and curiouser.
I stay in grandpa’s posh LA apartment, one of three properties he left me in his will. Most of the place is chrome, absurdly clean, and lacking any personal artifacts. The one exception is a photograph of me on his nightstand. I am 4 or 5, the age when he left me, laughing in candy cane pajamas. When I tilt my head in the dim light faint fingerprints appear on the silver frame. I stare at them for hours wondering why he never tried to find me.
Jimmy said grandpa paid a “nice family” to raise me in the suburbs. He thought they’d give me a better home. “Safe from the LA crazies.” He didn’t come to visit because he wanted me to have a normal life. It’s probably good he didn’t. I’m not sure what would have happened if he knew the truth about how they treated me. The abuse. I’m sure it would have broken his heart.
Grandpa’s funeral is a who’s-who of the music scene and I meet more famous people and Hollywood stars than I can name. Each one says “your grandfather was a hell of a man.” I say “thanks” as if I’d been a part of it.
Grandpa left a lot of unfinished business, personal and professional. I sit through dozens of wildly uncomfortable meetings where people glare at me and say “who is this again?” They want to be sure I know I am a nobody. Unfortunately for them, I am the nobody who gets the money they think is theirs.
Apparently, grandpa led a very active social life. I have more than one drink thrown in my face. One woman even calls me a “charlatan.” For some reason I like it. I might have it tattooed on my arm. I can afford it.
Besides the apartment in LA, I now own a penthouse in New York and a beach house along the Northern California coast. I also have a car. It’s not just any car. It’s a shiny black 1956 Cadillac Eldorado Biarritz. I polish it myself with super expensive wax. I name it Ben.
After kissing Jimmy goodbye and promising to come back soon, I kick off my shoes and drive barefooted the six hours back home. I eat sunflower seeds throwing the shells out the window while wearing a flowing white dress with tiny daisies embroidered on the sleeves. My red hair tangles in the wind and I sing at the top of my lungs to the Grateful Dead.
“Walk out any doorway. Feel your way, feel your way like the day before. Maybe you’ll find direction around some corner where it’s been waiting to meet you.”
Pulling into the parking lot of my old work, I’m thrilled to see Gemma’s old brown car parked along the side entrance. I park beside it, run my fingers through my hair, and apply pink lip gloss. It’s a little over three hours before she comes out. I’ve been dozing off and on, but at the sight of her, I’m wide awake.
She’s wearing a black hoodie and she stops beside her car, digs through her big black bag, and pulls out a clove cigarette. Her makeup has smeared and it’s clear she’s been crying. I don’t want to startle her, so I wait.
After a few minutes, her eyes find mine. Recognition takes a moment but it’s worth it. Her face transforms. Light returns to her eyes and her cheeks pinken.
“Your golden egg, huh?”
Smiling, I nod slowly and pat the leather seat beside me.
“Let’s go to the ocean.”

Author’s note: It’s the first week of NaNoWriMo and so far I’m on track! Last night I ventured across town to read my poetry in person at an amazing bookstore. I’m leaning more and more into this writing life. It’s scary and beautiful. My story this week features the character who wanted me to write her last week, Eloise Lewis. She didn’t want to meet the devil, but she did want to run away to the ocean. It felt nice to give her a happy ending. I hope you enjoyed it.
Short Story Challenge | Week 44
Each week the short stories are based on a prompt from the book “Write the Story” by Piccadilly, Inc. This week’s prompt was to write a story where a fortune cookie comes true. We had to include the words numerology, hilarious, dictionary, recycled, brick, ocean, meaningful, garbage, star, and origin.
Write With Us
Prompt: A Strange Request at a Piano Bar
Include: carnival, apple, sprained, mask, juvenile, controversy, oxidation, twirl, awkward, sassafras
My 52-Week Challenge Journey
- What is the 52-week challenge?
- Week 1: The Heart and the Stone
- Week 2: The Biggest Little Gift
- Week 3: It Bearly Fits
- Week 4: The Claire in Clarity
- Week 5: The Family Tree
- Week 6: Through the Glass Windshield
- Week 7: The Final Goodbye
- Week 8: Sunset, Sunrise
- Week 9: Returning Home
- Week 10: The Water
- Week 11: Aw, Phooey!
- Week 12: Meeting Time
- Week 13: The Old Man
- Week 14: Dani and the Queen
- Week 15: The Golden Muse
- Week 16: Honeymoon Treasure Hunt
- Week 17: The Red-Haired Beauty
- Week 18: Playing Games
- Week 19: One Thing
- Week 20: The Child
- Week 21: The Carrot
- Week 22: Apple Stars
- Week 23: Something in the Water
- Week 24: Midnight Wedding Vows
- Week 25: Chocolate Kisses
- Week 26: The Island
- Week 27: Take Me By the Hand
- Week 28: When the Snow Falls
- Week 29: Stitches in the Woods
- Week 30: The Peacock Effect
- Week 31: New Experiences
- Week 32: Blood Moon Messenger
- Week 33: The Masterpiece
- Week 34: The Blackberry Quest
- Week 35: The Broken Shell
- Week 36: The Octopus in the Room
- Week 37: With a Touch of the Tapestry
- Week 38: Meet Me at the Elephant Ears
- Week 39: The Wheels on the Bus
- Week 40: Room 313
- Week 41: The Cornfield
- Week 42: Afraid of the Dark
- Week 43: The Abandoned Church
I did enjoy it. Thanks, Biidgette
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Oh, I’m so glad! Thank you.
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Such an interesting piece, dear Bri. You know how to craft attention-gripping plots and conflicts. Been awhile offline and I’ve missed reading you. Glad to be back and able to enjoy your good writing and photography. I’ll certainly return to your site in a bit.
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I’ve missed you! Thank you for reading and your kind words. I’m glad you have returned.
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You’re most welcome, dear. Glad to be back too and to find you doing just fine. 💕
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I love this one Bridgette 🙂
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I’m so glad! Thank you!
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Love where you went with this! Very engaging and well done! 💞💞💞
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Thank you so much, Dawn!
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I love it. I really got into the story and I like the relationship that’s developing between Eloise and Gemma.
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Thanks, Brandon. I like it too. I think Eloise Lewis has a lot more to say.
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It’s a great read. Well done, Bridgette
Signed, Bridget 🙂
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Thank you fellow Bridget! I appreciate the kind words.
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Oooo I loved Eloise! It was definitely the right decision to hold onto her for the extra week.
Your descriptions are so freaking good, lady! You’ve nailed it at painting vivid scenes this week. I can see Gemma’s purse and painted black nails and smell the clove cigarettes these two share.
This is such a profound story of hope in the face of bleak reality.
Thank you for sharing it!
You are rocking this writer lifestyle! Keep doing the scary things. You’ve got this 🙂
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Thank you so much! Your encouragement is so wonderful and appreciated. You inspire me and keep me going. I couldn’t do it without you!
I think Eloise Lewis wants a book. She’s got a lot to say. I had to keep reigning her in and editing her back. I wonder what will happen when I let her go? It’s kind of exciting to have found a character this clear.
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I enjoyed you good writing & beautiful photography! Beautiful Witte you relationship between both of in story. I like. It’s interesting ☺️ write ✍️ you! 👌
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Thank you so much! I’m so glad you liked it.
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You are most welcome 🌷!
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A wonderful story, Bridgette. You never cease to amaze me by being able to write such enticing fiction. I definitely didn’t see that ending coming. Sorry, I haven’t been able to read your piece ‘The Abandoned Church’ yet. My concentration skills are absolutely rubbish at the moment. I still have a tab open on my laptop for that post, and I hope to read it later as I love the way your stories take me out of myself and to a better place. I hope you are well and that your family are coping as best they can. I think of you all often. Xx 💖💞
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Thank you, Ellie! You have no idea how much it means to me you want to read my stories. They are an investment in time for sure and it brings me tremendous joy to know they take you out of yourself for a bit. It’s all I want as a writer—to provide an enjoyable escape. Your kindness is everything. 🙂
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Thanks for sharing this . You are an amazing writer. . These images caught my attention. Anita
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Thanks, Anita!
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This was good…
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked it.
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I LOVE this one. The characters had rough edges to them. They felt as if I knew them but also like I was getting to know them. I enjoyed the bad habits, the nail polish, the depth of this. Absolutely delicious as always! Also… Reading your poems in a book store?! WOW!! You go girl!! 💪💪💪
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Thank you, LaShelle! This story felt different to me for a lot of reasons. I think Eloise Lewis is a strong character with a lot to say. I was so happy to give her a happy ending, but I have a feeling her adventures are just beginning. She wants to spend a lot more time hanging out with me.
Yes! I had a cold sore pop out about an hour before the poetry night and still went. This felt like a Herculian accomplishment to me and I regret nothing!
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You are my hero! I can’t wait to hear more about Eloise in the future
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This is amazing! Sorry, when it says “short story” I have to wait until I have a small bit of time so I can read it through. I loved this. I am glad she got a happy ending. I can’t believe you read your poetry somewhere! That is amazing. Were you nervous? I keep saying I am going to go to a local poetry slam but I chicken out. Loved this story.
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Thank you so much, Nicole. I know these stories aren’t short in blog terms. I’m always so grateful people take the time to read them and comment. It makes me so happy and hopeful perhaps someday I’ll be a published writer. Stranger things have happened.
You bet I was nervous! If they hadn’t made me go first I think I would have chickened out (but I have a feeling the newbies always go first for that very reason). Now, I want to go every month. It was such a positive experience.
You should do it! I wish we lived in the same town (we don’t do we??) and we could be real-life friends. I’d support the heck out of you reading some poems!
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I think you write beautifully. I believe you will be published. Your stories, you just kind of fall into them. I mean that sincerely. Your details are perfect.
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You have made my day! Thank you.
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Loving your writing Bridgette, this is gentle, incisive, emotional. Do you intend to publish this collection or leave it on the blog?
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What a kind thing to say, Roy! Thank you. I do intend to publish the best 10 or so of these in April of next year. It will be a collection of short stories and poetry. I’m excited and a bit terrified, but hopeful!
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whoa impressive write and nano on track update. ❣️
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Thank you, Cindy! I hit the halfway mark on NaNo today. Doing a happy dance over here.
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So happy and loving all of your writing truly. Yayyyyy for you and doing the happy dance with you! 💞
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This was such a lovely heartwarming story, Bridgette! 🙂 They’re both such vivid characters that really make us empathise with their struggles & cheer their respite from the daily grind ❤ As a former retail worker, I definitely empathise with both Gemma and Eloise.
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Thank you! I’m so glad you enjoyed these characters. I think they might be some of my favorites.
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