3/30
an old ache woke today
i thought it drowned in Miami
while hard waves crashed my thighs
salt meeting salt
but here it is again
calling loudly of hidden rushing waterfalls
not dry deserts or busy cityscapes
chosen not settled
go away, i half whisper
folding myself into my rough hammock
while a tiny brown bird sings
without an answer
More short poems:
1/30: not my cat
2/30: comfort
Love this one, Bridgette!
~David
Thank you! It feels like a start of a conversation to me and not a complete thought, but maybe that’s okay. It’s definitely a challenge to express a complex feeling under 60 words.
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Thank you.
Good one 🙂
I’m so glad you like it. Thank you.
Love the unresolvedness and curling into feeling of this poem, Bridgette! <3
I wasn’t sure if the unresolved part felt incomplete, but not all feelings get resolution or can be healed away. Sometimes they come back. Thank you for understanding, Sunra.
Absolutely, Bridgette. Which is why the unresolvedness totally works. I always like that in a poem rather than a perfectly finished poem, so you leave the reader there in the moment to ponder.
Yes!!!
Me too Sunra. love the unresolvedness.
lovely poem Bridgette.
Thank you! I’m so glad it worked for you.
Loving this evocative and emotional piece that creates such an image!
Thank you. I’m so glad you liked it. It’s been a week.
Very powerful piece that leaves such a poignant impression of those unresolved anxieties. The clipped sentences really add to that frustration – can definitely relate to this. <3
Thank you so much, Tom. I’m enjoying the challenge of writing these shorter poems.
Sweeps us right into the scene with powerful sense memories – great job! 🙂
you could break my heart with this poem, but I refuse
I understand, I do, but I refuse
no doubt, life contains confusion, harm and pain in no short supply
but I refuse, because we are bigger than life is, even when
it eats us alive. I refuse to go quietly.
(how’s that for the tail wagging the dog?) I love your poem, and
(you make me want to write, better than I am) so there
beautiful (in one word)
Thank you for these amazingly kind words, Neil. I’m inspired by your work and by you. The ache hasn’t gone away, but I’m fighting through it. “I refuse to go quietly.” I like this and will keep moving forward one word at a time.
Wonderful poem, Bridgette. Love it.💕
Thank you! I’m so glad you loved it. That means so much to me.
My pleasure. I sure did.💕
Lovely. Short! and leaves individual completion.
Yes, it’s been fun to write these short poems. We all have a reoccurring ache, I think? It refuses to go away quietly, but we have to keep fighting back and keep moving forward.
What a moving, evocative poem, Bridgette
Thank you! I’m glad it moved you.
My pleasure
Mmm dry deserts. ❤️
Better than dry desserts, I think?
I dry dessert would not be good, but I love my dry desert. 😂
Every word perfectly chosen; every line its own exquisite story. ✨ Your captivating photo completes this gorgeous post!
You’ve made my day with this comment. I’m working really hard on making each line stand alone and I’m happy you see it. I appreciate you so much!
Thank you for sharing that, Bridgette. I am happy to have added some cheer to your day. Just sharing my reaction to your work. 😊 Your hard work shows! 👏🏻
Moving and evocative Bridgette.
Thank you! I’m glad it moved you.
To be profound yet succinct is no easy feat.
You’ve accomplished both with beauty and grace.
What?! I’m so happy you think I’ve done that as it’s my goal with this project. Thank you!!
My great pleasure, Bridgette!
Beautiful. Bittersweet.
Thank you. Yes, I’m still in a bit of a funk but I’m trying to write myself out.
I could picture the ocean when you wrote salt on salt..very powerful.
Thank you. I cried big tears in the warm ocean waves, but somehow I still have more.
Love the poem. Very emotional & heart touch words write in short poem. I feel that and understand that’s unresolved! You make my good morning, Bridgette 🌹
Thanks! I’m so happy to make your morning. Have a wonderful day.
Thanks! That’s your pic.
Wonderful poetry beautiful friend
You are so kind! Thank you ❤️
So beautiful
Thank you so much!
Came through this beautiful poem today while going through the discover tab. Am glad i did. It was an amazing read. Thank you
I’m so glad you liked it! Thank you.
Melancholy piece, Bridgette…beautifully expressed in so few words 💞💞💞
Thank you, Dawn. I appreciate your kindness!
this was beautifully written 🙂
Thank you so much!
Excellent! Rivals your BD poem! And that photo up top! So perfect. (I wish I would take more time to ‘poem’ back to you like Neil did.)