13/30
birds nibble holes in sunflower leaves
makes them ugly
we can’t have pretty things
while starving
coughing dreams chase away crystal bubbles
rips the cord
we can’t see pretty things
while starving
body aches where fingertips should be
craves what neverwas
we can’t be pretty things
while starving
More short poems:
1/30: not my cat
2/30: comfort
3/30: ache
4/30: remember
5/30: graduation
6/30: big love
7/30: Heavy and light
8/30: delicate
9/30: leaping
10/30: Dad gave me…
11/30: solstice
12/30: twisted
I love thecway you repeat the last line in every verse. It created a nice rythum.
I’m so glad the rhythm worked well for you. Thank you!
See see, what I keep telling you. Modest you. I like your poem very very much. Loving is who your are. I can see and hear this much. No matter what stands in between. Beautiful words, beautiful…
Thank you! I was so unsure about this one, but I’m glad you liked it and find it beautiful. That means so much to me.
Yep, like children, poems, ours, yet they have a life of their own.
Well done, Bridgette. I like the mantra feeling of this one. 😊
Thank you! I’m so glad you liked it.
The repetition’s very effective here & your vivid descriptions paint a powerful piece, Bridgette! <3
I’m so happy you liked the repetition, Tom. I appreciate your comment so much. Thank you.
modest
repasts
Thank you 🙂
WOW! This is great, Bridgette… So good!
Much love,
David
Thank you for the wow! Made my day 🙂
Bridgette this is amazing.
That means so much to me. Thank you!
Love the poem. The best write up poem you. coughing dreams chase away crystal bubbles
rips the cord.!
I’m so happy you liked it! Thank you.
Most welcome!
Wonderful, poignant poem, Bridgette.
Thank you for such a kind comment. 🙂
This was powerful!
Thank you! 🙂
So many in our world live this way. A powerful poem!
Thank you so much, Mark. Yes, it seems to be getting worse and worse.
I like the tripartite structure of this and the subtle but effective verb changes preceding the phrase ‘pretty things’ —
Thank you so much. I was surprised when the first verse of this poem came to me and loved playing around with the repetition. These short poems are an excellent exercise.
haiku are ideal for that —
This is stunning, Bridgette. I love the ‘almost’ repetition. I’ve been working on a poem tonight using that technique I think. You did a great with it. Pulled everything together so well. May you starve no more! 🙂
What a kind comment! Thank you ❤️❤️❤️
love the repeat 👏👏
Thank you. ❤️
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Very powerful, the impact is even more with the repetition. 💞💞💞
I’m so glad you think it’s powerful. Thank you.
A wonderful poem, dear Bridgette. It’s a powerful piece of writing, yet, delicate and sensitive at the same time. I love the repeated pattern of the last two lines of each verse. I so recognise these lines in myself, too. Much love to you Xx 💖🌹💖
I’m so happy you liked it, Ellie. Much love to you too 🙂
Great poem. It reminds me of “you can’t eat your cake and have it”.
I could totally see that! Thank you.
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Powerfully written.
Thank you so much!